My writing

Andrea Beeler
English 131.11
David Debaker
December 13, 2007


How I Write
In the beginning of this class I thought I was a good writer. Well as we went on learning how to prefect our writing I quickly figured out that I was not as good of writer as I thought I was.
I always was good at brainstorming. I found out early on that was the best way for me to get out what I want to put on the paper. I use what I call a web when I pre-write. This is a series of bubbles that link together to form my idea that I want to use in the paper I am writing. I learned to use more of a verity with my writing process during this semester. I learned that it is ok to be kind of all over the place and not quite organized. My writing has greatly improved over this semester. I always have liked writing and really expressing myself through my words and this semester has just helped my polish my style of writing. Know my writing makes sense and it is not all over the place. My pre-writing is kind of all over the place and not organized but by doing that it has some how made it easer to make my paper more organized and put together. Some things that I would like to continue to work on in the future is not repeating myself so much and also sentence combining.
With my writing process I like to break down my paper into little bubbles. I call them my thought bubbles. For example for my Prison Break paper I put Prison Break in the middle of a blank piece of paper and then branching off of it I put scenes, and other things like actors, seasons, events in the series that I like. I do it this way because it makes it easer to go back and feed off of what I was thinking and then it all comes together when I want to write my paper. Some ways I have improved my writing process is I now know it is ok to be messy in my pre-writing. I use to try to make everything nice and organized but that had never really worked. So know I have excepted the fact that I am unorganized and ever since then I have become a better writer.
Over all I really liked this class and I think it really has helped my prefect my writing. With out this class I think I would still think I am the best writer and I really would not be that good at all. Now I am a lot more confident with my writing and I know when I hand something in that it is my best work and it is something I can be proud of.

Story about the Accountant/Stripper

Bob woke up on an early Friday morning and he realized that he was late from picking up little Stacy and little Bob jr from both of the different mothers houses. So he jumped up, took a quick shower them hurried off to pick them up. He did not have any plans to do with the kids so he decided to take them back to his home and take them bowling. After a fun day with the kids he took them both back to their mothers houses and he had to go start getting ready for work. As he was getting ready he decided that he was kinda tired so he layed down just for a min he said. Well the min turned in to hours and when he finally woke up he found himself late for work. As he was running around scrambling for his clothes that he was going to wear he found a bright see through shirt and dress pants. Bob was more open with what is job was that most people are when they are in the stripping profession like he is.
Bobs life was a lot different than most. Standing only 5 foot 5 inches he was kind of a short guy. He has red hair, glasses, and big feet. Things like having five kids with all different moms at the age of 25, naming his dog gpaw, and having the profession of an accountant stripper made him even more of a weird guy. Bob has never told his kids what he does for a living, all they know is that their dad lives above a bowling ally and that is really fun to them. Bob has tried to turn his life around many times but it usually never works for him. Once he tried to get a new job and even move out from his parents house, the whole moving out thing did eventually work out for him. He now lives in an apartment above a very smoky, loud bowling ally.
Bob drive a beautiful new car. After a very successful night at the club where he works part time he went out and bought a brand new mustang. Bright red convertible top he thought he was a stud. But it didn’t matter what he thought, all that matter was what the ladies thought. Nobody around town had a clue as o why so many people threw themselves at Bob, they just knew that people did. For gosh sakes, he had five children already at the age of 25. Now that’s a lot of kids.
After he realized how late he actually was, he ran the kids back home, jumped in the car and was out for a night of money making bliss. After a few hours on stage, he decided that it was late and he had to get home to be able to actually make it to his side job, accounting, in the morning. So he raced home and ran up the stairs to his apartment, barging in the door like he actually owned the place. He jumped into bad with a smile on his face, you would too if you made all the money he had that nice.
Bob may seem average, but he has the type of charm that can knock a lady off her feet, and he does. So even thow this is not the life I would want to live it seems pretty ok for little old Bob. And as long as he is ok with it I guess I am to.

what i have learned

through out the entire semester i thought i was a strong writer. as the semester went on i have found that i was not as good as i thoughi was. i have found out taht i do not do a very good job with prewriting. i am also not very good with research papers. i really feel i have grown as a strong writer. i really htink that i have become a better writer.
Thanks

Writing process

i have found that with this paper my writing process really helped. firse i brain stormed about what i want to write about and then i broke that list down to things that i knew alot about. afrer narowing my list down i settled on writnig about Prison Break. after i figured this out i began brainstorming on a web what i want to talk about. i had alot of different things branching off of my web but it really seemed to help me in the end when it came time to write my paper. i have found out that if i do a good prewriting it mkes it easer to write the paper off of it.

Questions about my writng

I think the strengths of my writing is when we get to write about our personal experences. i am verry good at using alot of decription in my papers so i htink that is why i do so well in those typws of papers. our first paper was my best paper because i was able to talk about something that has really impacted my life. this paper was easy for me but it was also hard in the same note. it was easy because i was able to vent about a really dificult time in my life. it was hard to because i had to open up to people that i did not know and tell them about my life.
i think what was good with my reflecive paper was the amount of detail i put into it. i made people reallly see waht thik kind of experence is really like. i think that in my this i believe paper i really expressed my deeings about my dog and how i lucky i was to have found him. in my research paper i talkes about a profession that i am intrested in going into.
i think i need improvement on grammer of corse but i also think i could use more dialog in my papers. there are some papers that i could have really used some dialog but i didnt.
With my reflective paper i think u could use more dialog so that peopel can really read the feelings that were going on that day. I think with my this i believe paper i could tell more about what chance is like know that he had grown up a little bit. an with my research i thhink i couls put a little more data in there.
with my writing process i hace found that i like to do the little web thing. i have always liked to do that because i am not a very organized person and i think the web is messy. i just hink it fits me more.

Total # of Blog posts
19 (u have my simpsons blog)

Total # of GPAW hours
7

Rough Draft

My rough draf is just that really really rough. i am having a really hard time finding good information about 3d and 4d imaging. ever time i go to google or yahoo and type in any thing about 3d and or 4 d imaging all that it gives me is information about a spacific hospital and not information about the actual imaging. i have reasearched for about 2 to 3 hous straight and then just got frustersted and gave up. i know alot about my subject all ready so basicly my whole paper is all abut my knowlage and little facts that i have found online. this paper is very irratating

Research

With this research i have been having some trouble trying to find good information. alot of the sites i go to are sites that want to sell me a machiene or want me to come to their hospital. the only really good sorse i have gotten so far is the information i got ftom my mom. she is a sonographer up at oaklawn hospital in marshall. she has been a sonographer for about 10 years now and she has really good information for me. i also talkes to my mom student and found out from her what i have to look foward to going in to this field. she told me that it is very demanding and it takes alot of time to complete my clinicals. so i am still looking online for more sorses but it is going to take some time