My writing

Andrea Beeler
English 131.11
David Debaker
December 13, 2007


How I Write
In the beginning of this class I thought I was a good writer. Well as we went on learning how to prefect our writing I quickly figured out that I was not as good of writer as I thought I was.
I always was good at brainstorming. I found out early on that was the best way for me to get out what I want to put on the paper. I use what I call a web when I pre-write. This is a series of bubbles that link together to form my idea that I want to use in the paper I am writing. I learned to use more of a verity with my writing process during this semester. I learned that it is ok to be kind of all over the place and not quite organized. My writing has greatly improved over this semester. I always have liked writing and really expressing myself through my words and this semester has just helped my polish my style of writing. Know my writing makes sense and it is not all over the place. My pre-writing is kind of all over the place and not organized but by doing that it has some how made it easer to make my paper more organized and put together. Some things that I would like to continue to work on in the future is not repeating myself so much and also sentence combining.
With my writing process I like to break down my paper into little bubbles. I call them my thought bubbles. For example for my Prison Break paper I put Prison Break in the middle of a blank piece of paper and then branching off of it I put scenes, and other things like actors, seasons, events in the series that I like. I do it this way because it makes it easer to go back and feed off of what I was thinking and then it all comes together when I want to write my paper. Some ways I have improved my writing process is I now know it is ok to be messy in my pre-writing. I use to try to make everything nice and organized but that had never really worked. So know I have excepted the fact that I am unorganized and ever since then I have become a better writer.
Over all I really liked this class and I think it really has helped my prefect my writing. With out this class I think I would still think I am the best writer and I really would not be that good at all. Now I am a lot more confident with my writing and I know when I hand something in that it is my best work and it is something I can be proud of.

Story about the Accountant/Stripper

Bob woke up on an early Friday morning and he realized that he was late from picking up little Stacy and little Bob jr from both of the different mothers houses. So he jumped up, took a quick shower them hurried off to pick them up. He did not have any plans to do with the kids so he decided to take them back to his home and take them bowling. After a fun day with the kids he took them both back to their mothers houses and he had to go start getting ready for work. As he was getting ready he decided that he was kinda tired so he layed down just for a min he said. Well the min turned in to hours and when he finally woke up he found himself late for work. As he was running around scrambling for his clothes that he was going to wear he found a bright see through shirt and dress pants. Bob was more open with what is job was that most people are when they are in the stripping profession like he is.
Bobs life was a lot different than most. Standing only 5 foot 5 inches he was kind of a short guy. He has red hair, glasses, and big feet. Things like having five kids with all different moms at the age of 25, naming his dog gpaw, and having the profession of an accountant stripper made him even more of a weird guy. Bob has never told his kids what he does for a living, all they know is that their dad lives above a bowling ally and that is really fun to them. Bob has tried to turn his life around many times but it usually never works for him. Once he tried to get a new job and even move out from his parents house, the whole moving out thing did eventually work out for him. He now lives in an apartment above a very smoky, loud bowling ally.
Bob drive a beautiful new car. After a very successful night at the club where he works part time he went out and bought a brand new mustang. Bright red convertible top he thought he was a stud. But it didn’t matter what he thought, all that matter was what the ladies thought. Nobody around town had a clue as o why so many people threw themselves at Bob, they just knew that people did. For gosh sakes, he had five children already at the age of 25. Now that’s a lot of kids.
After he realized how late he actually was, he ran the kids back home, jumped in the car and was out for a night of money making bliss. After a few hours on stage, he decided that it was late and he had to get home to be able to actually make it to his side job, accounting, in the morning. So he raced home and ran up the stairs to his apartment, barging in the door like he actually owned the place. He jumped into bad with a smile on his face, you would too if you made all the money he had that nice.
Bob may seem average, but he has the type of charm that can knock a lady off her feet, and he does. So even thow this is not the life I would want to live it seems pretty ok for little old Bob. And as long as he is ok with it I guess I am to.

what i have learned

through out the entire semester i thought i was a strong writer. as the semester went on i have found that i was not as good as i thoughi was. i have found out taht i do not do a very good job with prewriting. i am also not very good with research papers. i really feel i have grown as a strong writer. i really htink that i have become a better writer.
Thanks

Writing process

i have found that with this paper my writing process really helped. firse i brain stormed about what i want to write about and then i broke that list down to things that i knew alot about. afrer narowing my list down i settled on writnig about Prison Break. after i figured this out i began brainstorming on a web what i want to talk about. i had alot of different things branching off of my web but it really seemed to help me in the end when it came time to write my paper. i have found out that if i do a good prewriting it mkes it easer to write the paper off of it.

Questions about my writng

I think the strengths of my writing is when we get to write about our personal experences. i am verry good at using alot of decription in my papers so i htink that is why i do so well in those typws of papers. our first paper was my best paper because i was able to talk about something that has really impacted my life. this paper was easy for me but it was also hard in the same note. it was easy because i was able to vent about a really dificult time in my life. it was hard to because i had to open up to people that i did not know and tell them about my life.
i think what was good with my reflecive paper was the amount of detail i put into it. i made people reallly see waht thik kind of experence is really like. i think that in my this i believe paper i really expressed my deeings about my dog and how i lucky i was to have found him. in my research paper i talkes about a profession that i am intrested in going into.
i think i need improvement on grammer of corse but i also think i could use more dialog in my papers. there are some papers that i could have really used some dialog but i didnt.
With my reflective paper i think u could use more dialog so that peopel can really read the feelings that were going on that day. I think with my this i believe paper i could tell more about what chance is like know that he had grown up a little bit. an with my research i thhink i couls put a little more data in there.
with my writing process i hace found that i like to do the little web thing. i have always liked to do that because i am not a very organized person and i think the web is messy. i just hink it fits me more.

Total # of Blog posts
19 (u have my simpsons blog)

Total # of GPAW hours
7

Rough Draft

My rough draf is just that really really rough. i am having a really hard time finding good information about 3d and 4d imaging. ever time i go to google or yahoo and type in any thing about 3d and or 4 d imaging all that it gives me is information about a spacific hospital and not information about the actual imaging. i have reasearched for about 2 to 3 hous straight and then just got frustersted and gave up. i know alot about my subject all ready so basicly my whole paper is all abut my knowlage and little facts that i have found online. this paper is very irratating

Research

With this research i have been having some trouble trying to find good information. alot of the sites i go to are sites that want to sell me a machiene or want me to come to their hospital. the only really good sorse i have gotten so far is the information i got ftom my mom. she is a sonographer up at oaklawn hospital in marshall. she has been a sonographer for about 10 years now and she has really good information for me. i also talkes to my mom student and found out from her what i have to look foward to going in to this field. she told me that it is very demanding and it takes alot of time to complete my clinicals. so i am still looking online for more sorses but it is going to take some time

research

I have decited that i am going to get more spacific with my research. i am going to talk more about the new advancements with the sonography. the new 3d and 4d imaging is something that really intrests me. i think it will be easer to to get more spacific with my paper rather than talking about all of sonography. and i also want to know more about the spacific things that i will be preforming later in my career

Blog Post on Research Paper

What is your topic?
My topic is going to be about Sonography

What about this topiic interests you?
Everything about this topic intrests me. i think it is really intresting that people can use sound waves to look inside a human body. it is just amazing that people can look at babys inside a mommies tummy and see a real baby groeing.

What do you already know about your topic?
Well i know that sonography uses sound waves. i know that there will always be a high demand for sonogtraphers due to the fack that the world will always need them just like doctors. i know that it requirs two years of college and a nine month program to be consitered a registered sonographer( at jcc).

What is the main question you want to answer about your topic?
My question is "What do sonographers really do and how does the sound waves really work?"

What are some sub questions you want to answer?
I want to know who invented sonography? waht was the first machine like? how did people react to the first idea of sonography?

How do you plan to do your research?
I plan on using the internet to find the dates that sonography was invented. i plan on taling to my mom because she is the one that got me involved in the sonography idea. i also plan on talking to my mom student because she can tell me what it like to be a student and waht i can expect to go through.

Bad day!!

Today started out like every other day but i just did not feel right. i did not have to go to school and i did not have to work so i figured it was going to be a good day but man was i wrong. do u ever have those days where u just feel blagh. i have been working alot and maybe i was just really tired but it seemed that nothing was going right. i got in a fight with my dad which quickly turned into a fight with my mom so i left my house to try to blow off some steme. right after i left i almost got hit by some crazy guy that did not no how to drive. so i rode around for a while and tryed to forget about what just happened at home. them as i was driving the song "the river" by garth brooks came on the radio. this was brents favorite song so now i was not thinking about my parents but i got really upset about my brother. so i want home and made myself something to eat which i droped half of it on the floor. so after all this shit happened in a short time i just decided to go and lay in my bed for the wrest of the day.

My best friends. (assigned)

I have 2 of the best friends in the entire world. First there is Angela. we met in the 4th grade and we jsut hit it off. we have been through so mych together. when we were kids she was always over at my house riding my horses and riding 4wheelers. we would always go to the lake with my parents and ride the tube. she has always been my best friend even when she went away to college. we did not see each other as much but we both were always there for eachother. now that she is back at home we hang out alot more. i dont see her as much as i would like because her life is a little crazy right now but she knows that no matter how crazy her life gets i will always be there for her and her new arrival.

Next there is my friend kara. we met out junior year of high school in out cosmetology class. we really did not like each other at first i thought she was rude and thought she was a know it all. i dont realy no what she thought about me at first but i am sure is was not very good. we started getting really close in out senior year. we started hanging out all the time. she has always been there for me throught out everything in my life. here is is almost 4 years later and we are closer than ever. she knows everyting about ne and i no that she is the kind of person tha would do anything for me.

i dont htink i could get any luckier i have to 2 best friends a person could ever ask for. i know they would do anything for me as well i would do for them.

Work sucked

ok so when i started this job i thought it was going to be really easy. tractor supply is only open till 8 oclock to i figured i would never be there that late. well i was wrong. so they told me that wensday nights were fraight nights and they asked me if i would help out. i fugured it would not be that hard to i told them ya. i did not get out of work till 1 in the morning. i was on my feet all day and i was standing up the whole time. and all the people that were there working kept telling me to hury up. well i am new and i have know idea there anyting is at in the store. so 12 finally rolls around and i aks my manager when are we going to be leaving. well my boss is a jerk and of corse he gave an ass hole comment back. so i was mad and frustersted as i went back to work. finally toni another girl that i work with came u p to me and told me that it is time to go. as soon as she said that i was out the door. i did not get home till 1 in the morning and i had class the next day at 9:30. it was a long day

Fun Weekend

This weekend was a really fun weekend first i went out to my parents friends house right behind my house for a big fire. while we were there we went out on the 4wheelers. this was blast. there were about 10 4wheelers and we were going out on the trails and just having fun. we went out and some of out friends got lost out in the woods and we had to go out and find they. it was really funny because they were really drunk so they had no idea there they were at. we finally found them and they were just sitting there with a beer and laughing.
The other thing that i did was go out to another thing that i did was i went to ahother fire. this was a really good time because i got to see alot of peopel that i have not seen in a long time. some people that i graduated with and other friends that i have not seen since graduation.

New Job.

So i just got a new job at Tractor Supply. so far it is going really good i have been there for about 2 weeks. i work with alot or really cool people and i get to meet new people all day long. i love being able to interact with people all day. the work it self is not really that hard it is just hard on wensday nights when we have freight night. Freight night is on every wensday night and this is where we have to stay after the store closes and stock the shelves. this is really hard because everyting we have to stock is really heavy. i did not get out of work toll 1 in the morning and i got there at 4 in the afternoon. that was a really hard night.

Hard week

This week was kinda hard for me. Friday Sep 21 was my brothers birthday. that day i really did nothing but sat around missing him more than ever. then we found out that one of his friends was killed in a bad drunk driving accident and that was really hard to deal with aswell. my family and some of our friends just sat around a bonfire and talked about my brother and just rememberd him for what he was. it is just like every time i turn around there is something going wrong. i hate when i have weeks like this and i hope this is the last one i have like that in a long time.

My Favorite Sport

I would have to say my favorite is Volleyball. this is my favorite because i have been playing it since i was about 8 years old. i played volleyball all through my middle school and my high school career. i was a middle hitter on my team and i was so good at this position because of my hight. Volleyball is the best sport to play because it is a very agressave sport even though it is no contact. it is consitered a no contact sport but i think it is a contact sport because i also like to hit the ball in to the other teams face. and i think it is the best sport to watch because what guy does not wanna look at a bunch of girls running around diving on the floor wearing spandex lol. Volleyball is a very entertaining sport because you are consently moving and diving to get the ball. you must do any ting in your power to not let the ball hit the floor.

My Writing Process

I have decovered that i really like to do the scattered outline. i just sit down with a pice of paper and jsut start writing what ever is on my mind. i then look back and see what it is that i wrote down the most and then i can see what i want my paper to be about. i am not a very organized person so my out line is not very organized either and i dont no why but this has been the best way for me to fogure out what to write about. i have also realized that i need to use more dialog in my papers. i have pretty good papers but i want to do something that will make them even better so i think by adding dialog it will become a even better final paper.

my baby dog.

i have a little puppy named chance. he is about a year old and i got him from the pound. i saved him when he was only 3 months old. he is black and has white feet and a little white on his nose and his chest. he is like my kid. he goes every where with me. he loves the car and the lake. chance is a begal lab mix so i call him a begadoor lol.. i love him and he is so funny

Hell Michigan

Ok so there is a motorcycle ride that my parents friends do ever year over laborday weekend. this is called the hell ride because we all ride to hell michigan to a biker lounge. this is the first year that i have gone on this ride. there were 56 bikes this year. last year there was only 32 so this ride is growing every year. so right after we took off from budas house (my parents friend) about 5 minets after we took off all hell broke loose. i was riding on the back of my friend erikks bike and my parents were on a bike infront of us. we were in a huge groupe so as the front of the group turened a corner we were waiting to turn aswell. after erikk and i make the turn i seen hands in the air and people junping off of their bikes and running. i looked over in a field and seen another of my parents friends in a field on his bike. he was ok but he had to jump off of the road to miss the fallen bike. by the time i realized what was going on help was already on its way. i ran over and realized that someone3 had layed down their bike. the bike was flipped over and the guy was standing up an he was all bloody. the passanger was his girl friend and she was sitting on the ground also bleeding. i did not no waht to do but i called 911. they were ok but they were pretty banged up. her knee and her lip was bleeding. the guy was loosing alot of blood through his arm and he ws really worried about his girlfriend. the amblence came and loaded them up and we just continued on our ride. we got a call a couople of hours later and it was the guy saying that they are fine but he had 2 broken ribs and alot of road rash and she only had really bad road rash.. so they were pretty lucky

Let it snow.

One thing that i really liked is how descriptive they were in the story. One example of something that i liked was when they said "they would be frozen like mastodons in blocks of ice." Another thing that really set a picture in my head of the surroundings was when the were talking about what the car looked like and how it had chains on its tires. This made it really clear what the kids were seeing and going through.

One thing that i did not like is how the writer seemed to really rush the story, there was a lack of feeling because it was just like one thing right after another. Another thing that i did not like was the ending. It was short and it did not seem to fit the story well. I think there should have been longer and ending. It just left me wondering

goals

some of my goals for this english calss it to learn how to be a better writer. i always have liked writing but there is always some points that i have trouble with. i tend to get stuck trying to start the paper, once i get started it is pretty easy but it is just that starting paragraph i have trouble with. i also want to be able to learn how to be more decripive with my storys.
As a student i hope to get more serious about school. i tend to kind of slack with most school things like puting them off till the last minet or just saying i will do it later. i really want to rase my gpa so i can get into my sonography program and really excel in it. i hope to be done with school with in the next 2 years and then i have my 9 mounth program that i will have to finish before i will be able to work up at the hospital that my mom is working at.